Could someone critique my build?

[MCBYT]

Going to be my biggest map yet, so it's a bit of a learning experience. In my opinion, the face (mouth/hair mainly) and arms need a bit of work. If you agree, disagree, or have any other points, please do tell.

(ignore the clay bits at the bottom/top, they're for copy/pasting)

./plot h mcbyt 8 on Parkour to see it in more detail.

 

[nasser_919]

this is amazing keep doing more builds i would love to see more <3 , you jsut need more practice but over all amazing

 

[Tas]

You nailed the legs and body, I agree the face and arms are a little weird. Do you intend to add hands?

 

[MCBYT]

You nailed the legs and body, I agree the face and arms are a little weird. Do you intend to add hands?

There already are hands, they're in fists though so hard to see.

 

[oWinqs]

There already are hands, they're in fists though so hard to see.

I'd recommend pronouncing those hands a little more, and add a little more shape. This will help them seem more like hands. I'd recommend adding more height around the knuckles. Besides that, looks amazing!

 

[MCBYT]

Hands have been fixed. I think these look pretty good to me. Onto the face!

 

[MCBYT]

Alright, the face is pretty good now too. I was mainly displeased with the chin/mouth, so I fixed those up, slightly adjusted the eyes/cheeks, and also lengthened the ribbons she's wearing (just because)

 

[dylannn]

I think the back needs to arch out more. Looks a bit oddly shaped atm. Also, the proportions between the size of the eyes and mouth don't seem right. Other than that, awesome build.