Rejected Hard Parkour Submission - Shards

[Mahalouker]

Information
Hey there, i made my first Parkour map and would like to make some more. This one is called Shards and it is aimed at the 'Hard' difficulty. It was built on the creative server on orc001's first plot (although it was built by me). You can easily access it by typing /warp Shards.

Here are screenshots of the course:
The general map:

The start:

The end:

Work you need to do, before the map is ready:
The only thing you really need to do is set up a tp, so that when you jump the glass block, after the 3rd checkpoint, it will tp you to the last part. That is the only thing that needs to be done (apart from the checkpoints).

Screenshots of where the tp needs to go
The block that will tp you to the last part:

Note after the tp is set the signs can be removed.
The block that you will tp to:

Note after the tp is set the sign can be removed.

Overview
Thanks for reading my parkour submission and I hope it gets accepted for hard. Remember it is built on orc001's first plot on creative (or /warp Shards) and that the tp block and the checkpoints need to be done for the map. Hope you enjoy it!

 

[Dacon]

Will be reviewing this soon

 

[Billybo10000]

This map has been REJECTED!

Reasons:

The entire course feels very cluttered and unsure of itself. Design-wise, it's too different and clustered.
We cannot use TPs inside an actual course, and thus it does not work well.
The slime jumps are too excessive and not very pleasing to the eye.

But you can always retry another time :D

~Billy