Rejected yoyo's jump

[merthemarij]

username: merthemarij
Map name: yoyo's jump
warp: /plot h merthemarij 2
Difficulty: medium
Number of jumps: around 48

yoyoing is my hobby so i made it the theme of this map, i really appreciated the criticism on my other submission. it was very clear what i did wrong. i think i improved alot, so i hope it is good enough. thank you for taking the time to look at my map,i appreciate it. and i hope you like it : )

 

[k_rissy]

Hello merthemarij,

I regret to inform you that your map is being rejected.
The theme is original, well done!
The build is a bit accurate to what you were going for; however, it could be better. I would maybe expand your yo-yo's a bit, making them bigger with more detail. The yo-yo's are also spread apart quite a bit, which makes it look messy.
The parkour is varied a bit throughout, so well done. However, it is very messy due to the fact that it is floating a lot (meaning it isn't attached to the main build.) The length of the course and difficulty of the jumps are good for the medium difficulty.

Thank you for submitting this map, I would love to see more submissions from you!
Have a nice day,
Kristina