Rejected Blizzard Parkour Submission (Easy - Medium)

[I52SI]

Hi - before anything else I want you guys to know that this is my first map and is probably pretty terrible. I would absolutely love feedback, good or bad, on how to improve this map and future maps. By the way, I love your parkour and think that your server is really well run, so I am extremely glad to be submitting something.

Stats:
47 jumps (mostly easy jumps)
Ideally 3 checkpoints (marked suggestions)
Blizzard theme, and very compatible with void environment
Built by 52S
(You may see SocoFalls as partner but he did nothing!)

Thanks!!!

-52S

 

[rileeyyy]

The theme isn't very clear.

 

[I52SI]

I think it's pretty clear. You are parkouring up and around an icy mountain! I tried to do my best! :D

 

[KawaiiTurtle]

I think it is clear, btw I tried it and it is pretty cool in my opinion.

 

[I52SI]

THANKS!!!

 

[KawaiiTurtle]

THANKS!!!

Np

 

[I52SI]

Do you think it should be added?

 

[Pand]

It's really good!

 

[Tenshi]

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Comments
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Theme-
Your theme was semi-clear.
Which is why Im here reviewing it right now.
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Rank-
This map would be ranked medium. Please
Change the wool to yellow if you havent already.
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Additional Comments- This is a very sloppy parkour, but I can see why. In future maps however, Try to make your map clear and clean looking. I feel that this map should be denied for that reason, And you should practice making builds and clean parkour.

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[KawaiiTurtle]

Do you think it should be added?

I think you could add a little bit of detail be I'm gonna say 50% Accepted/50% Archived, if it does get accepted or if if doesn't, either way I think you should make more maps. =]

 

[I52SI]

Thanks! If you want I can fix it. Do /plot visit 52S to get there. If that doesn't work message me. I will work on it some more and try to improve it before it's permanently turned down
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Comments
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Theme-
Your theme was semi-clear.
Which is why Im here reviewing it right now.
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Rank-
This map would be ranked medium. Please
Change the wool to yellow if you havent already.
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Additional Comments- This is a very sloppy parkour, but I can see why. In future maps however, Try to make your map clear and clean looking. I feel that this map should be denied for that reason, And you should practice making builds and clean parkour.

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What wool?

 

[KawaiiTurtle]

Thanks! If you want I can fix it. Do /plot visit 52S to get there. If that doesn't work message me. I will work on it some more and try to improve it before it's permanently turned down

Thanks, I'll be reviewing it again soon. Anyways, what is your minecraft name? We could make some maps together

 

[I52SI]

My user is 52S!! It would be a great pleasure to build maps with you! However, I am sorta outta plots...
[DOUBLEPOST=1457161270][/DOUBLEPOST]GUYS I HAVE EDITED A TON TENSHI WILL YOU GO BACK ON AND SEE THE PROGRESS!?

 

[Pand]

Still doesn't fit the theme, I mean I don't see a lot of changes TBH, It doesn't remind me of a blizzard, it reminds me of a snowy mountain and you're trying to find shelter on it. It is getting closer though.

 

[I52SI]

I think it's quite clear. Forget the blizzard part.

 

[KawaiiTurtle]

My user is 52S!! It would be a great pleasure to build maps with you! However, I am sorta outta plots...

Im not out of plots so I could do /plot trust 52S and then you could build in my plot. BTW I'm vast rank so I have like 7 plots, most if them not filled at all

 

[gogre]

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Comments
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Theme-
Your theme was semi-clear.
Which is why Im here reviewing it right now.
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Rank-
This map would be ranked medium. Please
Change the wool to yellow if you havent already.
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Additional Comments- This is a very sloppy parkour, but I can see why. In future maps however, Try to make your map clear and clean looking. I feel that this map should be denied for that reason, And you should practice making builds and clean parkour.

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Tenshi, please stop doing this. It is classed as 'mini-modding' and is against the rules. On top of this, it is extremely annoying to players and staff. You are in no position to judge other peoples creations. If you continue to do it, your posts will be removed and eventually you will be punished. Thankyou.

 

[I52SI]

Was it good then Drakey?

 

[Emmalouise]

I'm sorry, I'm going to deny this parkour as we have an ice mountain and it's not very fun to play, Hope to see more parkours in the future!