Rejected WaterfallTemple by JustWyren - Hard

[JustWyren]

Builder: JustWyren

Map name: WaterfallTemple

Plot: -19;92 (JustWyren's plot)

Number of jumps: 66

Other things I wanted to say: I think hard is the difficulty of this map, and thanks to caseyclosed for helping me a bit and giving me advices.

I hope I respected the format

- JustWyren

 

[caseyclosed]

Hey JustWyren, here is my critique of your map! (please note that I am only a Mapper and my opinion has no effect on the final decision.)

The build you have made is great! I really like all the fine details and the river flowing from the temple is a very cool. I don't think much else can be said about this build because I have zero complaints! The theme is also good because to my knowledge there are no maps similar to this kind of Waterfall Temple. I already worked with you on the parkour difficulty and variation so we are good on that front!

Overall, this map is very solid and I believe it is a good addition to the server. Nicely done :)

 

[Quinny]

Hey JustWyren :)
I'm glad to have seen your progress on this! I think it turned out great. The theme of a "temple" isn't the most original, but I think the execution of this theme is well done and very unique, so you should be okay there.
Thanks for working with casey on the parkour! It's great now with variation and consistency in the difficulty, so it's a +1 from me :)

 

[Proteges]

Hey there JustWyren, this is just my personal opinion on your parkour map, you don't need to take in my feedback if you don't want to and I'm only here to help you, I am a moderator but I'm not grading your build just having a little review of it.

Your map name is quite descriptive and definitely explains what your map is which is always what I like to see, I hate doing maps that have a name that is completely different from the actual theme of the build, great job with that section. Your map is certainly beautiful from the inside/interior and it seems you put quite a lot of work into that section, what I would recommend is that you spice up your interior as it's just a wall of stone/dirt and looks quite ugly, maybe add a wall or some ancient relic carvings there, idk just my idea :)

Block variety ~ Your parkour map certainly has some nice block variety and looks quite unique from my perspective, I love that you added slime block and fence jumps as it just makes the map more of a blessing to play and mess around with. I'm just gonna add this in here but the theme from my perspective seems flawless, I don't really think there are any other map submissions with builds that are similar to this, great job on your submission!

Best of luck :D

 

[JustWyren]

Hey there JustWyren, this is just my personal opinion on your parkour map, you don't need to take in my feedback if you don't want to and I'm only here to help you, I am a moderator but I'm not grading your build just having a little review of it.

Your map name is quite descriptive and definitely explains what your map is which is always what I like to see, I hate doing maps that have a name that is completely different from the actual theme of the build, great job with that section. Your map is certainly beautiful from the inside/interior and it seems you put quite a lot of work into that section, what I would recommend is that you spice up your interior as it's just a wall of stone/dirt and looks quite ugly, maybe add a wall or some ancient relic carvings there, idk just my idea :)

Block variety ~ Your parkour map certainly has some nice block variety and looks quite unique from my perspective, I love that you added slime block and fence jumps as it just makes the map more of a blessing to play and mess around with. I'm just gonna add this in here but the theme from my perspective seems flawless, I don't really think there are any other map submissions with builds that are similar to this, great job on your submission!

Best of luck :D

Thanks for giving your opinion! I'd just say that the cliffs I built are meant to be naturally formed, overtime, by the water of the river "digging" sort of idk how to explain that. That's why I didn't put "ancient gravings" or anything like that. Cool idea though!

 

[ThePKFish]

Hello!

This map is being rejected, but hear me out. The build is great! The theme could be considered unoriginal if you just focus on the temple aspect. But it is nothing like others, so I would call this theme original. The parkour is the issue with this map. I am not allowed to be brutally honest here, so I am going to give you as nice of a review as I can. The parkour is just all over the place. The signs do not really help and all the twists and turns you have to do just make it not fun. The block variation is mostly good, but the jumps are mostly the same. The parkour needs to be entirely redone. It needs to be made so it flows without abruptly sharp turns back and forth. It also needs to be reworked so there's not so many barriers. Once this is done, you can resubmit the course. This map will be accepted only if you have done what I have asked correctly.

Thank you for submitting this map!
If you have any questions, you may DM me on here, in game, or on discord!

-Ashley (ThePKFish, fishy1980)

Message me on discord if you want the full honest review. I only give honest reviews to those that are able and willing to accept full criticism of their maps.