Rejected PencilSharpener ~ Easy

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Mapname: Pencilsharpener
Creator: guyseth
Plot: guyseth 15
26 jumps 1 checkpoint
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pencilsharpener.png
 

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so swag!!!! whoever gave you the idea for the pencil itself is an artistic genius
 

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Manacube Maps in a nutshell: recreate a random rl object, get your map accepted ;)
 

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Hello Seth!

I know many people will disagree with me, but I feel this build could use some work, It's not the best looking, and could use some better shaping as well, I also feel like you could add some more detail to the sharpener itself and improve it, When I think of pencil sharpener's I really think of this... All in all, I wish you the best of luck! I will keep my rating as a 0.5.
 

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Hello Seth!

I know many people will disagree with me, but I feel this build could use some work, It's not the best looking, and could use some better shaping as well, I also feel like you could add some more detail to the sharpener itself and improve it, When I think of pencil sharpener's I really think of this... All in all, I wish you the best of luck! I will keep my rating as a 0.5.
Following this the platforms are the main drawback as the colours are messy. That would be my main comment.
 

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Hello Seth!

I know many people will disagree with me, but I feel this build could use some work, It's not the best looking, and could use some better shaping as well, I also feel like you could add some more detail to the sharpener itself and improve it, When I think of pencil sharpener's I really think of this... All in all, I wish you the best of luck! I will keep my rating as a 0.5.
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Hello Seth!

I know many people will disagree with me, but I feel this build could use some work, It's not the best looking, and could use some better shaping as well, I also feel like you could add some more detail to the sharpener itself and improve it, When I think of pencil sharpener's I really think of this... All in all, I wish you the best of luck! I will keep my rating as a 0.5.
Its an easy map so the build isnt suppose to be too complex. im sure everyone has a different idea of what a pencil sharpener looks like so you shouldn't comment on which one he chose to build. I was in a call with seth when he was building it and he said that he was using the pencil sharpener on his desk as a reference. From an artists perspective, using a live reference thats in front of you is far better and more accurate than using a photo, which is what he did. I honestly cant agree with anything you said about this map, its completely fine
 

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The table is really messy, would be way better if you tried to create a pattern or shading to make the colors not collide
 

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The table is really messy, would be way better if you tried to create a pattern or shading to make the colors not collide
he already fixed it
 

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Hello guyseth,

Your map will now be marked as ongoing; I have reviewed your map and it will now be discussed among map judges. This may take time, so please be patient.
 

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Hello guyseth,

I regret to inform you that your map is being rejected.
The theme is original, so well done there.
The build is the main concern with your map. Overall, it is quite underwhelming. The shading of your map feels quite monotone with the use of one color type. The shape of your map is also a concern as it appears to just be a basic oval shape. The blue interior is also lacking in design. The floor also now looks very bland.
The parkour is varied and for the most part the difficulty matches an easy, with the exception of two areas:
Both jumps are difficult without a sprint key (try to avoid this on an easy map.)

Thank you for submitting this map, I would love to see more submissions from you!
 
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